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I had to give you points off for this comment-
"Real talking - moving lips (!NO! speech bubbles)"
Is that supposed to impress me? I would be impress if the mouths actually match up with the speech, and maybe if the mouths had teeth or someting. Anyway, this was good for your first time but is still was pretty crap by most standards. Try making it longer next time, and for the love of god, fix the voice of stone cold.